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Education, from preschool through university, should be paid for by the government and therefore free to students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#education #university #government #students
It is argued whether pupils should pay for their
education
, or the
government
 should subsidise the
tution
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuition
 fee and make it totally free. Personally, I believe,
government
Suggestion
the government
 needs to subsidise heavily into the
education
 sector, so that everyone can have access to the body of
knowledge
.
Firstly
, we live in a
knowledge
 based economy, where proper
knowledge
 and
skillset
 sets the backbone of a modern society. Access to information and
knowledge
 is one of the basic needs to be fulfilled,
further
, without
peoper
marked by suitability or rightness or appropriateness
proper
 skills and
knowledge
 no one can survive in
future
Suggestion
the future
.
hence
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
Hence
, in order to secure the
livelyhood
the financial means whereby one lives
livelihood
livelihoods
 of its people the
government
 should have
porper
marked by suitability or rightness or appropriateness
proper
 scheme and fund for primary to university level
education
.
For instance
, in many countries
such
 as Bangladesh most of the people
can not
can not
cannot
 afford the required
education
 they need,
therefore
, the
government
 should take the responsibility and cater
this
 basic need for the people.
Secondly
, to build a better country, having
knowledgable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
 and skillfull people is the key factor to boost economic growth and prosperity.
Therefore
, the
government
 should look at
this
 investment
into
Suggestion
in
education
 sector as investing
into
Suggestion
in
 human capital development. If the citizen
have
Suggestion
has
 the access to tuition fee less
education
, they will eventually turn out to be future economist, scientist, lawyer etc.
that
Suggestion
That
 a country needs for
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 development.
Furthermore
, with a free
education
 system, more people will be interested to enhance their capabilities which is almost impossible when everyone has to pay for their
education
. Overall, the more free the
education
 is, the more capable human capital a country will get. In conclusion, my view is every citizen deserves to be enlightened with
knowledge
, and the
government
 needs to provide the platform by making
education
 free for the people that will eventually turn them into future assets.
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  • socio-economic background
  • equitable society
  • government-funded
  • higher quality standards
  • financial limitations
  • inefficiencies
  • wasteful spending
  • cost-effective
  • innovate
  • undervaluing
  • dropout rates
  • financial burden
  • well-being
  • higher education uptake
  • increased taxes
  • reallocation
  • vital sectors
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