Your English teacher has found a new penfriend for you. Write a letter to the penfriend and introduce yourself. Tell them what you like doing in your free time. Ask your penfriend to tell you about their hobbies and interests.

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Dear Pat, My English teacher has told me you’re looking for a penfriend so

I’m

writing to introduce myself to you.

I’m

24 years old and I live in Hong Kong. I

work

in the tourist industry as a tour guide. I live with my parents on an outlying island and I travel to

work

by ferry every day. I love my job as I get to meet so many interesting people from all over the world, but I don’t like having to

work

on public holidays and at the weekends! As for my hobbies and interests,

I’m

a bit of

fitness

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fanatic! I go jogging every morning before I go to

work

, and I always do some yoga before I go to bed. I play badminton twice a week and squash about once a fortnight. I enjoy hiking and try and get out

the

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country park at least once a month, but I prefer going swimming in the summer because I can’t stand the heat. And I absolutely detest gyms! I hate running on a treadmill that doesn’t go anywhere

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while staring aimlessly into space. Apart from sport, I

also

like dancing, and I often go clubbing with friends at the

weeekend

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weekend

I’m

really keen on R&B , and I can dance for hours. Anyway, enough about me! What about you? What do you like doing in your free time? I hope you’ll write soon and tell me about yourself. Looking forward to hearing from you. Best wishes, Kim

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Single idea per paragraph

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

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250 words

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Your English teacher has found a new penfriend for you. Write a letter to the penfriend and introduce yourself. Tell them what you like doing in your free time. Ask your penfriend to tell you about their hobbies and interests.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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