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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

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There are a lot of teenagers that would like to have a journey and a job in their gap year in some countries. To my way of thinking, learning to be independent since childhood is important for children's development. Parents should adjust their children to eat, sleep, bathe, walk, and study alone from the late infancy.
Additionally
, one of the best approaches to learn how to be autonomous for pupils is to study abroad. They live and study away from their parents, relatives, friends, and motherland. At the
first
 time, living without anyone’s help seems a very frightening, boring and difficult experience.
However
, children adapt and become independent eventually. From my point of view, the best way to develop a promising future for children, is allow them to be completely independent. According to my vantage point, many parents are afraid of potential dangers to their children.
Moreover
, mothers and fathers do not allow their kids to go out alone. Many mothers follow their teenagers to school.
For instance
, there are a lot of towns in which parents, do not let their children go to school or return alone. It has
very bad effect
Suggestion
a very bad effect
very bad effects
 on children’s mind. When they grow up, they may become very impatient, edgy and, bad-tempered so parents must be careful about their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 towards them because they will do the same towards their children in the future.
Therefore
, it affects their
next
 generation. In conclusion, I do not think that working and
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 alone in the gap year would have
negative influence
Suggestion
a negative influence
 on children.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
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  • Financial implications
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