Some young people believe it’s best to move out of their hometowns when they become adults, while others wish to live in their hometowns their whole lives. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

After turning into an adult, the young folk gets the option either to leave their comfort zone or to stay put in their same old town. In my opinion, rather than staying in the
hometown
, it is always better to leave the town for better career and opportunities. On one hand, when a person gets out of his city and moves into a mega city, he faces numerous challenges and pitfalls for the
first
time,
such
as taking the decisions on his own hand.
Life
without family can become quite cumbersome, and
this
new challenging situation of
life
teaches the best lessons to become strong and mature.
For instance
, when I stepped out of my home, I faced
wtih
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with
huge difficulties in a new vicinity, but those
hursh
unpleasantly stern
harsh
conditions made me a more adaptable, flexible and a successful person.
Furthermore
, these new conditions develop the can do attitude, which is very important for anyone to become more confident. And being confident is the key to
be
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being
successful. Without
positive attitude
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a positive attitude
toward
life
and confidence it is tough to get any work done in a harsh condition that we live in.
On the other hand
, staying inside the
hometown
also
comes with
lot
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a lot
lots
of benefits.
Firstly
, by nurturing ones comfort zone one can take care of his old parents, which is not an easy job when he is outside his
hometown
.
Second
, Not leaving the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
makes
life
easy
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easier
in many ways, socializing with friends and family, networking with people, serving the community are to name a few.
Finally
, for people whose
life
is set and have
lot
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lots
of property to take care of, leaving their city does not make much sense. In conclusion,
although
I do
undrstand
know and comprehend the nature or meaning of
understand
why many people want to live in their
hometown
forever, I strongly believe for a better career path, and to learn more about the walks of
life
, the young people should walk out of their comfort zone and accommodate themselves in big cities to become more successful.
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