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Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio-diversity? What solutions can you suggest?

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Nowadays, Eco imbalance became
an
Suggestion
a
 serious issue and caused or causing by people across the globe. There are many reasons for
this
 and important of them are discussed below. Coming to the cause, They are various ways by which problem have been created.
Firstly
, deforestation, due to which there is rapid change in climate conditions, which add to the point.
For example
, too much cut down of trees, impact the global temperature and rainfall. Because of that, some species population have
decrease
Suggestion
decreased
 in their count.
Secondly
, Increase in meat consumption, hunting or fishing may lead to extinction of some more animal's.
For example
,
As a result
 of fishing, population of most of the
sea food
edible fish (broadly including freshwater fish) or shellfish or roe etc
seafood
pupulation
the people who inhabit a territory or state
population
populations
 got reduced and few got disappeared. Switching to the solutions for the above, Everyone should be responsible for increase of green.
This
 increase rains and decrease the heat.
For example
, Forest area
tend
Suggestion
tends
 to more cool than the places, where we don't have trees. Regarding the other, we should encourage public to go for more vegetarian and less meat in their meal. Because of
this
, we can restore the about to extinction animal count. For a stand, if people tend to eat more fruits and vegetables,
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
prey
Suggestion
the prey
 of
othe
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
the
 living beings for food will be reduced. In Conclusion, Not only the government, but it
also
 the
reponsibility
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
 of each and
everyone
Suggestion
every one
 of us to reduce the problem and keep the balance in nature.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • habitat destruction
  • deforestation
  • urbanization
  • overexploitation
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • invasive species
  • conservation
  • sustainable practices
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • ecosystems
  • species population
  • genetic diversity
  • environmental awareness
  • protected areas
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