Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal of money than people in other important professions. Some people think it is fully justified while other think it is unfair.

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Nowadays, many are choosing sports as their mainstream career option because successful
sportspersons
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are earning more than many other skilled professionals. While some people believe that it is not fair, many
thinks
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think
that the wealth
earnt
gained or acquired; especially through merit or as a result of effort or action
earned
by successful sports professionals is reasonable.
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essay will discuss both the views and try to justify why the sports professionals are deserved to earn more than other non-sport related professionals. Some people think sport professionals
are not deserved
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don't deserve
do not deserve
to earn more money than important professionals like doctors, engineers, and public servants. The eminent sports professionals enjoy celebrity status and earn more money by endorsements. But the non-sport professionals don’t appear in
media
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the media
as the sports professionals do, so their earning options are only limited to their
paycheck
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.
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, cricketers who played only a few matches in their whole career can make more than a highly skilled engineer which is believed to be unfair by some people.
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, I believe
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arguments do not stand up to scrutiny. In my opinion, successful sports persons are deserved to grow rich. Because sportsmen or sportswomen need to work hard for several years to achieve success.
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, sports as a mainstream profession has many risks that can put an end to a career
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as, physical injuries and lack of fitness. In a recent study conducted by the Cricket Council of India (CCI), only 85% of the cricketers must stop playing cricket before they earn a living.
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some people believe that accomplished sports personals growing richer than highly skilled other professionals, I believe it is completely rational to think they deserve it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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