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Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #paparazzi #celebrities #privacy #pictures #price #fame
Now-a -days, we encounter
lot
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lots
 of news regarding the
celebrity
 pictures online, in magazines, newspapers. There is a better side as well as too much privacy invading.
Papparazis
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Paparazzi
 should not follow the
celebrity
 all the time. It causes
lot
Suggestion
lots
 of media attention and publicity.
many
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Many
 times, celebrities deny for the pictures of their private time. On the other way,
papparazis
Suggestion
paparazzi
 have to survive on the latest
celebrity
pictures including
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pictures, including
 their minute to minute movement. They work
for
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in
 different media groups for these picture stories to be included as soon as
possible which
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possible, which
 in turn gathers
lot
Suggestion
lots
 of public attention and selling of the newspapers and magazines. On social media platforms, we often see these
celebrity
 stories. Based on the number of stories, a
papparazi
 has to get incentive from the organization he/she works for. In my opinion,
papparazis
Suggestion
paparazzi
 should cover the stories once they get confirmation from the celebrities and not to invade their private space.
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