nowadays,young children are owing mobile phones.some people agree and some disagree. What is your opinion about this.

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In every issue in the society, There are bound to be divergent views. There is a growing trend
on
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of
youngesters
a young person of either sex
youngsters
youngster's
having cell phones which has resulted
to
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in
arugement
a fact or assertion offered as evidence that something is true
arguments
amongst people. In my view, I completely agree that juveniles should have access to mobile telephone
owinig
owed as a debt
owing
owning
to the fact that it helps the young child to connect to people when in distress and
emegency
a sudden unforeseen crisis (usually involving danger) that requires immediate action
emergency
.
Firstly
, an adolescent who owes a cellular
phone
will have
feeling
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a feeling
the feeling
of satisfaction within.
as
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As
well as their parents too.
This
is because, when in danger, a
saviour
a teacher and prophet born in Bethlehem and active in Nazareth; his life and sermons form the basis for Christianity (circa 4 BC - AD 29)
Saviour
is
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has been
is being
just
bottons
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a button
button
away and with the high rate of crime around the world
thesedays
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these days
, it is a necessity far young
children
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child
to owe a handset.
For instance
, a research carried out by sociology students at the University of Benin
,
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,
Nigeria in March 2018, revealed that 12 per cent of youngsters who were
vitims
an unfortunate person who suffers from some adverse circumstance
victims
of rape and murder were children who were helpless and have no access to
phone
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a phone
the phone
. Another point to consider, it makes communication easier and it is
finanicially
from a financial point of view
financially
wise to owe a
phone
.
This
means that
instead
of using a
payphone
to pass a very important message to a person; where one has to pay some certain amount money depending on how much time it takes to convey the message, which seems to be more expensive than using mobile telephone.
Also it
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Also, it
is very convenient for
parents especiall
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parents, especially
parents especially
to call their youngsters
instead
of
inconvenencing
an inconvenient discomfort
inconveniencing
another person just to get through to them. In conclusion, evidently from the points outlined, it is explicit that youth should have access or owe a mobile
phone
because it saves time and money,
also
makes communication easier.
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