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The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give opinions.

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Scientific developments
has improved
Suggestion
have improved
 the life of the people. Some people believe that it created a big gap between wealthy people and poor people While some believe that it reduced the gap. Let us discuss about both the views. The variety of
technolgy
Suggestion
technologies
technology
 available to people has increased tremendously. Starting with the mobile phones, there exists a huge variety and different brands. Each has its own features and the price of the mobile phone varies on the quality of the technology and the number of features it offers. Though all the mobiles have most of the common features, but the quality of the high end phones cannot be matched with the low
cost
 phones.
However
, Poor people might not be able to afford
this
 high end
phones
Suggestion
phone
.
On the other hand
, Scientific improvements paved the way for free calls. Earlier, people used to pay for the incoming calls. Nowadays, the
cost
 of the internet pack is minimal, where it comes with free incoming and outgoing calls which brings
the large
Suggestion
the largest
 number of poor people to use mobile phones.
Additionally
, low
cost
 cars have become possible because of the latest technology.
This
 encourages the people with low income to buy cars.
Likewise
, Companies are coming up with low
cost
 products to increase their market among middle class people. To conclude, a wide variety
in
Suggestion
of
techonolgy
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
 has definitely contributed in bridging the gap between the rich and the poor, but the quality of the technology that reaches poor should be improved.
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