Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business. Why do you think that is? What could be done to encourage more people to take interest in the art?

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art
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is very significant facet of every culture in
entire world
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the entire world
. Science, technology and business occupy the place of
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, with very less appreciation
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the problem
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reflects the culture of the particular country. The value of
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is diminishing because lag of encouragement and very few employment. Government
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is preserving
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art
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the art
of the ancient people through
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museums, but
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it does not care about the current generation skills. The skillfull
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of the these
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generations
is culture reflection to
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next generation
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the next generation
. Even business
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technology and science enhance
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development, but
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plays
important role
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an important role
.
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is considered less important due to the lab of awareness in people. The importance of
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should be encouraged by government through the appropriate employment to the craftsman.
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government
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the government
will pay money to artists who are working
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well
in that field for them if
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the government
provided jobs, people will be fascinating to choose arts To conclude, choose career is completely depends one interest but creating awareness about
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the arts
can leads to motivate people to take arts. Not only that individual who
are already fascinating
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is already fascinating
about
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will get encouraged to develop their skills.
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