In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?

There is no doubt that there are many people who sift
lot
Suggestion
a lot
of efforts to excel in education and occupation. They believe, by doing hard work only, there is a possibility to get recognition in terms of appraisals and academic scores and it is a good to prove oneself as efficient. To embark on, people who give their best so that they can be rewarded and meet the expectations in order to obtain required marks in exams.
This
is because there is no shortcut of getting
sucsess
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
sources
sizes
other than making
lot
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lots
of efforts.
Additionally
, it will make them unique amongst all of their competitors.
For instance
, there are many people in my organisation who spend sleepless nights just because of getting
good
Suggestion
better
progression in their career.
In contrast
, no efforts or less might lead them to be
lagged
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lagging
behind in their life.
Moreover
, Efforts
usually returns
Suggestion
usually return
positive results, the reason of
this
is there would be some learning from one's attempts, if made to fulfil an objective either in
competetive
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
examinations or in
office
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the office
and the efficacy of
such
people would improve.
For instance
, people learn from their mistakes
manier
mean or intend to express or convey
meaner
times and these mistakes are nothing but a result of the efforts made to achieve some goal. In conclusion, working hard is one of the
bset
(superlative of 'good') having the most positive qualities
best
way
Suggestion
ways
to meet an objective for many
people which
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people, which
in turn would add feather in cap to
themselves
objective case of they
them
. The productivity of people will be enhanced by making efforts,
hence
it is really beneficial for one's growth.
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