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Governments prohibiting the underage children for getting full-time jobs in certain countries. do you agree or disagree.

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Many countries are putting limitations on the employment age. Hiring below 18 years is considered as illegal. I strongly agree with the statement.
CHildren
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Children
 are becoming money-minded these days.
they
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They
 want to earn in phone number
digits but
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digits, but
 they are unaware of the fact that doing a full-time job will only provide them short term benefits like buying an expensive car, clothing, shoes, and foreign trips.
On
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In
 the long term, they will only gain menial jobs with minimum education.
Thus
, proper education should be the primary focus at
such
 a young age for a financially store
future
a channel along the eaves or on the roof; collects and carries away rainwater
gutter
fodder
.
Furthermore
, permanent employment can lead to a social breakdown of the youngsters.
For instance
, if a 16-year-old opt for a job
instead
 of school,
then
 it often leads to isolation. At that age, we have lots of emotional, physical, and mental experiences with our friends, family, and teachers who make lifetime memories. Children abolished from these memories may face depression and can fall for drugs or alcohol. As far as the
countries
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country's
 growth is concerned, it will suffer from a serious economic crisis. Children are the future of the nation. They are the upcoming doctors and engineers, and uneducated children can be a burden on the country. To conclude,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 totally support the government's decision of restricting the children to do full-time jobs for their brighter future. It will
also
 help the country in building an economically and socially strong society.
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