Today, majority of children are raised by their grandparents due to the fact that their parents are busy working. To what extent do you think it affects the whole family?

Now a
days
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day
it has become a norm to be raised by
ones
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one's
grandparents.Since the immediate parents are occupied by their
curriers
the particular occupation for which you are trained
careers
and they can hardly find any
vaccant
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vacation
vacant
time to spend with their kids.The
upcomming
of the relatively near future
upcoming
essay will elaborate the
benifits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
and drawbacks of being
broughtup
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brought up
by grandparents and how it affects the family.
to
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To
begin with, grandparents have the
experiance
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experience
and tolerance to deal with
kids
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kids, hence
hence
it is
benifecial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
for them to raise the kids.
Secondly kids
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Secondly, kids
learn a lot
form
a giver or sender
from
their grandparents in terms of manners
,
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,
ethics, love and care.Parents are usually more comfortable in leaving their kids with their grandparents as
commpared
examine and note the similarities or differences of
compared
compered
compare
to a babysitter or unknown strangers.
kids
a young person of either sex
Kids
will learn the warmth and respect for elderly in their youth when their upbringing is done by elderly grandparents.
For example
the words of
wisdem
accumulated knowledge or erudition or enlightenment
wisdom
that
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
got from my grandfather were priceless, he
tought
impart skills or knowledge to
taught
thought
me the ways of life that
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
could have taken me years to learn
my self
reflexive form of "me"
myself
. There
is
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are
have been
always
to
being one more than one
two
sides to
story
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the story
a story
,
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,
when we talk about the disadvantages of being raised by grandparents being spoiled by their love is the
first
thing that comes to mind.
Secondly
, when kids spend less time with their immediate
parents they
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parents, they
tend to
losse
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
loose
their respect for their father and mother.Kids will no longer be
emmotionaly
in an emotional manner
emotionally
emotional
attached
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Attached
to them any more and that will cause a gap in their relationship.As the kids will grow up they will fill
this
gap with drugs or crime. To conclude, it is both healthy and unhealthy to be raised completely by grandparents.Grandparents should always be a part of
kids
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kids'
life and they must play a vital role in their
upbringing but
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upbringing, but
similarly
parents should not entirely hand over their
responsiblities
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibilities
of raising their own kids to their parents.It will create a psychological gap in the
kids
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kids'
minds and will result in
violance
an act of aggression (as one against a person who resists)
violence
and crime in the long run.
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