In today’s society, both Western medicine and traditional, complementary forms of medicines are now widely known and used. The effectiveness oft kinds of treatment is determined by the patient's mental attitude towards it.

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Nowadays people are well aware of modern
medicine
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and traditional
medicine
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such
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as
ayurveda
(Sanskrit) an ancient medical treatise summarizing the Hindu art of healing and prolonging life; sometimes regarded as a 5th Veda
Ayurveda
and
accupunture
treatment of pain or disease by inserting the tips of needles at specific points on the skin
acupuncture
. The mental approach
of
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to
the
patient
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decides the effectiveness of both the medicines. I partially agree to
this
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and in
this
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essay will explain reasons why effectiveness depends on proper
treatment
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rather than
patient
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's mindset. Advancement of
medical industry
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the medical industry
is tremendous. We can find
medicine
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for almost all the
disease
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in the world, which are fast and safe in curing the
disease
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.
In addition
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to
this
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, there
also
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exists traditional
medicine
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, which is
also
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prefered
more desirable than another
preferred
prepared
for most of the diseases.
For example
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, people prefer
ayurveda
(Sanskrit) an ancient medical treatise summarizing the Hindu art of healing and prolonging life; sometimes regarded as a 5th Veda
Ayurveda
for fracture and modern
medicine
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for
heart transplant
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a heart transplant
. These medicines are tested and proven to be effective. Diagnosing the
disease
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and providing the correct
treatment
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irrespective of
method
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the method
we follow may cure the illness quickly.
On the other hand
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, People's belief plays a huge role in
effectiveness
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Effectiveness
. There could be a rare case where people follow one type of
medicine
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and couldn't see an improved result which might be due to the different factors. Suddenly, they hear about
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
type of
medicine
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from some friend and believe that it will cure them. Here, the
treatment
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of
disease
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from other type might be ordinary, but it is the belief of the
patient
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that made
this
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treatment
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effective. In summary,
Although
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patient
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's belief is vital in curing the
disease
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, I feel that it is the proper
medicine
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for the diagnosed
disease
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that will cure it fast and safe.
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