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Some people think parents should control the behaviour of children from a very young age but others think we should give them more freedom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is a common belief amongst a few individuals that kids attitude can be best
molded
shaped to fit by or as if by altering the contours of a pliable mass (as by work or effort)
moulded
 at a youthful
age
, while others are of an opinion that kids are better
of
from a particular thing or place or position
off
 with more liberty. I believe both control and freedom should be balanced together when it comes to raising children the upcoming essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will shed more light on both views. Children are like an empty vase at a tender
age
. What ever we teach them they learn & believe without a
second
 thought. As they grow up they are no longer as close to us as they were before,
hence
 they learn more from
outside
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outside, then
outside than
then
 from home, which can be either be good or bad depending on the community and society we live in.It becomes quite difficult for parents to
mold
form in clay, wax, etc
mould
 them towards the right direction once they have been exposed to the outer world like high school & college.
For
example i
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example, I
example I
 was controlled and disciplined by my parents from an early
age
.That has changed my
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and made me a
gentlemen
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gentleman
.
On the other
hand when
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hand, when
 kids are given freedom at an early
age they
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age, they
 can no longer control
themselves nor
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themselves, nor
 can
the
people in general
they
then
 distinguish between good and bad.
Such
 kids fall prey of bad habits and destroy their childhood. As they become
adults they
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adults, they
 are limitless and have no respect for their elders nor do they possess feelings for anything.
for
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For
 example a much recent survey done by the US child services on the inmates of Texas county jail proved that they were either neglected by their parents as a child and they were given the freedom to do
what ever
one or some or every or all without specification
whatever
 they desired when they were kids. Which destroyed them in their adulthood. To
conclude it
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conclude, it
 is always a good idea to control
kids
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kids'
 attitude from
a
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an
 early
age
 rather than give them a free hand.
Otherwise they
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Otherwise, they
 will end up as a burden to the society by not fitting in.I am of the opinion that parents are the best teachers & preachers for their children when done right at an early
age
.
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