Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in terms of aid for health care and education. To what extend do you agree?

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Provision of assistance by wealthy nations to nations that are not wealthy, in terms of health and education is necessary. Some people and I are of the opinion that rich countries should assist poor countries due to the inherent advantages of doing so.
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. There are many reasons why wretched nations need
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the assistance
of rich ones, one of
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is in the area of health care. Provisions of aids to these nations will help in fighting deadly diseases.
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, Ebola
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in Nigeria in 2015. Nigeria was able to defeat the diseases with support from countries
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as the USA and the UK. The timely intervention of these giant countries helped eradicate Ebola in Nigeria, thereby preventing a deadly
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of the diseases which could have killed millions of people in the country. The
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could have
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spread to other countries including these two big countries as people are always travelling from one part of the world to the other. Another area where rich countries need to support poor countries is in education. Education helps in liberating people and empowering nationalities of these nations.
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, it is only when people are educated that they will be able to use new inventions
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as telephones, cars, laptops, television e.t.c.
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the richest
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products.
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help in improving their economy. In conclusion, I believe that helping poor countries in terms of health and education will help prevent
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outbreak
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outbreaks
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create more markets for companies of these rich countries.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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