Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent times, there has been a constant debate on how children should contribute to the society. While some argue that unpaid community services should be mandatory as a part of high school programmes, others argue that we should not force anything on others. I completely agree on the latter side of the argument. On the one hand
,
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,
some people believe that community services like working for charity or teaching under-
priviledged
blessed with privileges
privileged
kids, is necessary for the children to imbibe a sense of responsibility towards the society and nation. They say kids should grow up understanding the importance of problems surrounding them so that they have a better perspective about life.
Besides
,
this
will help to teach discipline as well as the value of money in a better way so that they
wont spent
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are not spending
won't spent
aren't spending
want spent
will not spend
won't spend
money on unwanted things.
For instance
, in Singapore,
free voluntary
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free, voluntary
service is made compulsory
at
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in
all schools, to create awareness regarding issues and problems faced by the common people. They want to create a future generation who empathise with others and
also
appreciate what their parents are doing for them.
On the other hand
, another set of people, including me, are of the opinion that it is
injustice
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an injustice
and
outrageous
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outrage
to force anything
on
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with
kids just because adults feel that they are superior. Every individual has their own identity and ideologies and others ought to
repsect
(usually preceded by 'in') a detail or point
respect
it.
Moreover
, nowadays, children are already in grave stress and pressure from studies and the tough
competition they
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competition, they
have with others and whatever free time they have must be utilized for their pleasure. If they are forced to do charity, it will do more damage than any good to themselves as well as the society. If at all they are willing to do something for others, it should be their choice rather than a burden.
Besides
, there is not harm in paying for the services they do since it will motivate them to work harder in
future
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the future
to earn money to support their family. A lot of teenagers do part time jobs in schools and
oldage
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old age
homes and they should be paid if they are in need. Not being a grown up is not a reason for not to pay. To conclude, it is the responsibility of every individual to contribute towards the country and
everyone including
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everyone, including
kids are supposed to do
this
. In my personal opinion, charity should be a
personnal
concerning or affecting a particular person or his or her private life and personality
personal
choice and nobody should be forced to do anything against their will or without payment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unpaid
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching younger children
  • valuable learning experiences
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • problem-solving
  • compassion
  • empathy
  • connect
  • positive impact
  • mandatory
  • personal development
  • social development
  • interested
  • motivated
  • volunteer
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