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stress-related illnesses are becoming increasingly common. what do you think are the causes of this? what solutions can you suggest?

#illnesses
Stress
 is
one
 of the major
issues
 that are
facing
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faced
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 by
the
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people
.
This
 has become increasingly common.
This
essay
 will discuss the main
causes
 of
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stress-related
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stress
 related
issues
 including longer working
hours
 and increased
job
pressure
.
This
essay
 will
also
 suggest solutions to these problems, including improving
one
's
work
-life balance and healthy diet.
Now a days
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,
stress
 is
one
 of the major
issues
 that are
facing
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faced
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 by
the
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apply
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people
.
This
 has become increasingly common.
This
essay
 will discuss the main
causes
 of
stress
-related
issues
 including longer working
hours
 and increased
job
pressure
.
This
essay
 will
also
 suggest solutions to these problems including improving
one
's
work
-life balance and healthy diet. There are many
causes
 for
this
 issue :
One
 of the main
reason
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reasons
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 is that longer working
hours
 and the others include
increase
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an increase
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 in
job
pressure
.
People
 often want to climb high and wants to achieve more at
an
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a
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 young age.
As a result
, they are working more
hours
 than usual which is not the right thing to do. Another reason is that the kind of
work
pressure
 is high among employees, especially
at
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in
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Information
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the Information
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 and
technology
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Technology
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 industry.
For instance
, a
job
 holder at a major company,
firm
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or firm
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at
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in
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 Chennai is required to
work
 more than 10
hours
 which
is leading
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leads
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 to
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a deplition
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deplition
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depletion
 of employee health.
This
 often results in mental and physical disorders. Maintaining the
work
-life balance and including healthy meals in their diet are the possible
solution
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solutions
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 to the problem
to overcome
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of overcoming
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stress
-related illnesses.
People
 who
work
 for long
hours
 may suffer physical,
pshychologically
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psychological
psychologically
 illness and food habits are
also
 contributing to
this
 problem.
For example
, many
people
 are involved in
work
 neglecting
about
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apply
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family, food,
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and excercise
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excercise
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exercise
this
resulting
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results
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negative
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in negative
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 impacts on our
body
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bodies
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.
Therefore
, in order to reduce
stress
one
 must include healthy diets, working out for an hour in their daily life.
Stress related
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issues
 have become
more
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increasingly common over the years.
This
essay
 discussed the
causes
 of
stress
-related illnesses.
This
essay
 suggested the possible solutions to lead a healthier and balanced life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stress-related illnesses
  • hypertension
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • modern lifestyle
  • work pressure
  • technological advancements
  • social pressures
  • material wealth
  • work-life balance
  • mindfulness
  • meditation
  • stress management
  • flexible working hours
  • telecommuting
  • mandatory vacation
  • educational programs
  • mental health
  • supportive work environment
  • counseling services
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