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It has been said, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?

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We cannot deny that books contain an enormous amount of knowledge, so it plays a pivotal role in our life.
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 need do practice and experience in the real life.
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, it can be said that both of them have the equal importance. At the beginning, each person has to undergo from the lowest level to the highest level. It means that we used to study from primary school to higher education. And all things we learned at these periods are from books. Thanks to that, we have the solid knowledge to experience in our lives, careers, so on.
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 we have certificates demonstrating how we studied before, employers will not recruit us because they don’t know what we can do and which outstanding abilities we have.
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the book
 is the thing that our forefathers suffered,
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 they concluded everything in it.
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, when we watch, learn in these books, we will know which things we should avoid and which things we should do. A good example of
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was
 in the past, farm workers do not know which time it is suitable to harvest.
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, they gained their experiences day by day,
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 they understood and knew the best time to harvest.
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 sometimes we feel the knowledge between books and real experiences has a few differences, we cannot
disclamate
(law) a voluntary repudiation of a person's legal claim to something
disclaimer
 book is the most basic source that everyone has to learn and suffer. In conclusion, both of them have the same importance and will be complementary.
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