Many countries are spending a huge amount of money on supporting their competitors to take part in some worldwide sports competitions. Others argue that it would be better if these countries can spend the money on children to take part in sports. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Large amount required to spend for
Olympic Games
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the Olympic Games
and
foot ball
any of various games played with a ball (round or oval) in which two teams try to kick or carry or propel the ball into each other's goal
football
world cup. Some support while others think that huge amount should be spent on young children to train them as
sportsperson
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a sportsperson
. In
this
essay, I strongly agree
to
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with
the statement, huge amount should be spent to motivate and to shape young sports athletes. Countries should spend enormous money for special training for the children who as eager to learn. Motivate youngsters by providing scholarships who are winning in the local competitions. They should provide well equipped facilities and amenities for
sportsperson
Suggestion
the sportsperson
a sportsperson
.
Moreover
, they have to form a successful team which contains trained coach, energetic athletes and medical practitioner. It strengthens patriotism among youngsters to serve for the
country
and make the
country
proud by winning world record.
On the other hand
, organizing
sports competition
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a sports competition
sports competitions
will economically profit for the countries. They try to show to best way to attract investors and business. It will attract many
tourist
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tourists
to their
country
and it result in more foreign currency transaction.
Moreover
, local industry like tourism, hotels, restaurants and so forth benefited by the visitors. It increases commercial and residential development; common that people return as residents;
there by
by that means or because of that
thereby
demand for housing and other services. Heighten local awareness, interest resulting in a great sense of pride and ownership. It improves
local community's
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the local community's
a local community's
visits a change to experience other cultures which broadens understanding. In a nutshell, though spending money on conducting
sports event
Suggestion
a sports event
will earn great
revenue but
Accept comma addition
revenue, but
investing monies for youngsters will improve sports in the
country
. More athletes would be motivated and win for their
country
and which improves status around the world and give pride and proud
to
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of
their nation.
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