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Do you think design of buildings have positive or negative impact? Which way it can effect on work and live?”

Nowadays, a lot of money is being spent on buildings around the world. Some say that design can have a positive
impact
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 on our lives
and
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, and
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 I agree with
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. It can create a positive environment that will
in
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, in
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turn
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turn,
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 help
people
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 to be happy and content. It is undoubtedly true that good architecture always has an
impact
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 on the
poeple
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people
. Working or staying
is
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such
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 an environment creates an order and a sense of discipline.
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, it creates
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positive energy
and
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, and
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people
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 will be more motivated and productive
on
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 whatever they are doing.
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, ancient Indians had a scientific knowledge
on
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 energy
and
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, and
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 they used to build houses based on what they called "Vaastu".
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 science has not been able to
proove
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prove
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, they still follow
this
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 as a tradition and make sure the construction will create a positive
impact
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 on
people
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. A good and structured building has
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an effects
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effects
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effect
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 on
people
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 around it. A properly arranged office
cabins
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will motivate
people
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 and make them happy, which in turn will increase the productivity of the company.
A proper
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 lighting and a comfortable chair will
beautiful
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create beautiful
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surrounding
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 will encourage every employee
and
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, and
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that is
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 the reason why many big firms hire
interiors
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interior
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 architects to design their office space.
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, a neatly arranged home creates a happy environment and
people
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 will find more time to
spent
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 at home.
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 will increase the bonding between families and will have a great
impact
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 on
themselves
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them
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as well as
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the
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society.
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, a kid from a happy family will succeed in whatever they do compared to
ne
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one
 from a dysfunctional one.
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, the place where we work or live
do
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does
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 affect our lives and
make
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makes
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it
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them
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 more meaningful. A properly designed space has a positive
impact
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 on everyone surrounding and is definitely advantageous in all aspects.

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task response
State your view clearly. Give reasons. Use one or two good ideas and end with a short restatement of view.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like and, also, but, so. Put ideas in a clear order: introduction, reason, example, conclusion.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Use short, simple sentences.
lexical
Use common words and clear examples. The idea that design helps work and mood is good; add a few plain examples from life.
content
Clear view that design can help life and work.
structure
Intro and conclusion are present.
ideas
Some good ideas on how space and light can help people.
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