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The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centers. It is feared that this trend can bring negative influences on the youths and the society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Nowadays there are more and more malls and everyone, especially younger people spend a lot of their free
time
 in these places. For the researchers, the increasing of
this
 trend could bring significant problems to the future society. I
am not completely agree
Suggestion
do not completely agree
have not completely agreed
 with
this
 statement because shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 are evolving and some of them look like small cities where youths can find not just
entertainment but
Accept comma addition
entertainment, but
 interesting activities like cinema and
library
Suggestion
a library
 too and have the possibilities to stay together. It is obvious that would be better if young people would spend their
time
 outside or doing other
activities but
Accept comma addition
activities, but
 sometimes, especially in big cities during the colder seasons, shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 are good options. Malls that are developing in these years are not simple groups of stores where is
possible
Suggestion
possibly
 buy everything, but are places where meet people and stay together. Almost every shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
have
Suggestion
has
 a cinema and a big
foods
Suggestion
food
 corner with every type of restaurants, kid areas and bars. Especially in the metropolis, shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 have become like new
neighborhoods
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhoods
 of the city, inside is possible do everything, there are hairdressers, beauty
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
. Concerts and meetings with fans happen every week in these locations. There are many experiences
that
is possible discover
Suggestion
are possible discovering
is possible discover
 and try,
for example
 inside the mall of
Emirates
Suggestion
the Emirates
, at Dubai, in the middle of the desert, is possible to ski. I think that spend free
time
 outside,
for
example in
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example, in
 a park or doing a walk across the city would be
certain
Suggestion
certainly
more stimulant
Suggestion
more stimulating
 and fascinating for young people. But in some city is arduous,
for example
 for the safety: in a mall there are always cameras and guards, so I guess that a parent is a bit more quiet knowing that his son is not alone in the street. If the government thinks that spend a lot of
time
 in a shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 would be a problem it should do more for youths. Building more spaces where boys and girls can be together and make these accessible to everyone, or free tickets for students for museums or cinemas,
improoving
getting higher or more vigorous
improving
 the green areas with sport courts, playgrounds, panoramic paths or organizing
free music event
Suggestion
a free music event
free music events
 in dedicate spaces, squares or theatres. In
conclusion I
Accept comma addition
conclusion, I
 think that spend free
time
 in a shopping
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 is not a considerable problem for the future society as long as during the day younger do other activities more
construcitives
constructing or tending to construct or improve or promote development
constructive
 for their future.
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