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Some people say that living in big cities is becoming more difficult. Others say that it is getting easier. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

#people #cities #points
Living in
metropolis
Suggestion
a metropolis
the metropolis
 is becoming
struggle
Suggestion
a struggle
 for some people,
where as
on the other hand
whereas
 some people believe that it makes them
more easier
Suggestion
easier
. In my opinion, it
is depend
Suggestion
depends
 on the individuals.
First
 of all, there is no doubt that the majority of people in a big
city
 face with many challenges and they are always trying to solve those problems. The most
obivous
easily perceived by the senses or grasped by the mind
obvious
 one is the increase of living expenses. As a consequence, most of the
city
dwllers
a person who inhabits a particular place
dwellers
 have to earn much money and become struggle for them.
Furthermore
, the accommodation is
also
 problematic in
city
Suggestion
the city
cities
a city
 because of the high cost of renting a house or buying a house.
As a result
, most of residents in
city
Suggestion
the city
cities
 have to stay in narrow and crowded flats and apartments.
On the other hand
, living in a capital makes more convenience in the way of living of
city
 dwellers. Many companies, enterprises and factories are situated in
big commerical
Suggestion
the big commercial city
big commercial city
a big commercial city
city
 so that it creates the
varities
a collection containing a variety of sorts of things
varieties
 of employment
oppotunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
 for residents in
city
Suggestion
the city
.
Besides
, many adequate infrastructures,
for example
, public and private hospitals, schools and universities are trademarks of big and
mordenized
brought up to date
modernized
city
. The people living in a
city
 are able to access
such
 a kind of facilities easily when they need.
Finally
, in my opinion, whether living in a
city
 is difficult or easy, depend on the individuals. Some people under the poverty-line have many
difficulities
an effort that is inconvenient
difficulties
cause
Suggestion
causes
 of the living expenses and the accommodation.
However
, the rich people
does not have
Suggestion
do not have
 those problems so that their life
are
Suggestion
is
 more convenience. In conclusion, living in a big
city
 has both advantages and disadvantages for
city
 dwellers.
In other words
, people have to accept those things and create their life better as long as they live in a
city
.
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