A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same right as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research.

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It is argued by
many that animals
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many animals that
should have the same privileges as humans.
Therefore
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, animals should not be utilized for
research study
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research, study
or as a source of food. In
contrary
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contrary, this
this
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opinion, some believe that animals should be used the way man wants.
This
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essay will discuss both views in details and an opinion will be given
Firstly
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, people who believe that animals should not be used are concerned as to the fact that these animals as are living creatures belonging to a family and they have the ability to develop emotions and feelings just like
humans
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humans, hence
hence
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using these animals for studies will be subjecting them to emotional pain which is the same as taking advantage of them. Another reason as to why respecting animals is important to some is that, they serve as great companions to humans.
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a study done in the UK showed that people who had animals has pets had less anxiety and depression, it was discovered that these pets had a
perculiar
beyond or deviating from the usual or expected
peculiar
particular
way of uplifting their mental state when they were depressed.
On the other hand
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, the use of animals in the food industry has been seen to be very lucrative. Most food restaurants use animals to prepare
variety
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a variety
of recipes
for example
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the use of
beef which
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beef, which
is from cow can be used to make
meat balls
ground meat formed into a ball and fried or simmered in broth
meatballs
, burger,
sharwama
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,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
this
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type of varieties attracts customers which
generates
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generate
income for these
organization
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organizations
.
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, with the developments of new deadly diseases
such
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as Ebola and it's like, in order to generate vaccines and drug formulations, it
is inevitable for animals not be used
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is inevitable for animals not used
isn't inevitable for animals used
is inevitable for animals not be used
for experiments as humans are more Superior to animals. In conclusion,
although
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some believe that animals should be used by humans as they want, I believe that these animals should not be harmed
instead
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they should be
nutured
help develop, help grow
nurtured
and kept to be
good human companion
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a good human companion
, only animals that of are many species should be used as
experiements
the act of conducting a controlled test or investigation
experiments
for diseases that poses to be life threatening to humans.
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