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In many countries school-age children spend their free time doing homework. Is it a good or a bad thing? Give examples based on your own experience.

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In modern times, parents are increasingly concerned with the activities of their children after they finish the school day. In light of these
concerns some
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concerns, some
 parents choose to have them do
homework
 with their free
time
, but nowadays there is debate as to whether
this
 has more positive or negative effects. After considering all angles of
this
 controversial question, the more long term solution is to take the attention off
homework
 and place it on the value
on
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of
 family
time
 and playing. Without question, children should not merely do
homework
 with their free
time
 because
this
 would harm the development of the family. It is harmful to a child to only complete
homework
 in free
time
 because
this
 prevents them from improving family relationships, and ultimately these relationships inspire overcoming challenges that lead to long term success in
life
.
In addition
 to improving relationships, family values allow us to have healthy friendships and motivation in
life
, but if the student is only doing
homework
instead
 of learning these lessons they will become a social outcast as they get older. Outside of the family
time
 argument, we can point to other factors that lead to rejecting a strict focus on
homework
. The values learned from playing during free
time
 at home cannot be underestimated, and
therefore
 we should reject the idea of only doing
homework
. When children play, they learn relationship skills
such
 as overcoming conflict and making new friendships. Not only is that point
valuable
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value
values
 to understand, but
also
 playing teaches how to enjoy
life
 in ways that
homework
 cannot accomplish because when doing
homework
, a student is solitary and isolated. These supporting points of relationship skills and learning to appreciate
life
,
indeed demonstrate
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indeed, demonstrate
 that playtime should be just as, if not, more important than
homework
. Sometimes when we focus only on academics
such
 as
homework
, we miss out on equally essential components of
life
such
 family development and playing with others.
Homework
 is not the be all and end all of a child's success. If
children
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the children
 played more and spent additional
time
 learning
values
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the values
from
Suggestion
of
 family, they would be more successful in school and
life
.
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