THE GROWTH OF ON LINE SHOPING WILL ONE DAY LET TO ALL SHOPS IN TOWNS AND CITY CLOSING DO YOU AGREE OR DISAREE ?

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Human being

survive

Suggestion

survives

on daily needs stuff and personal belongings in their life’s where they can buy some on e-commerce applications or by walking into the shops. Exponentially numbers of online users are growing, despite of

this

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individuals

are still attract

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are still attracted

are still attracting

still attract

with

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physical shopping.

Although

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head off to shop take

time but

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time, but

devote palatable to people. I denied

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in future online shopping replace shops with relevant reasons in

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paragraphs. On the one hand

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there are multifarious reasons to choose

physical shopping

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a physical shopping

the physical shopping

but predominant reason is quality of product, which does not expose properly on screen and define it is

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secondly

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Secondly

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people

can not

cannot

judge the product with prices

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where most of the ladies

loose

fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense

lose

their bargaining rights and loose interaction between society.

for

Suggestion

For

instance

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clothing and household things are unpredictable until have visual look

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size matters and price.

Thus

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these factors create a boundary between those ideas

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On the

second

hand

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online shopping is a long -process to deliver at customers place

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besides

this

physical shopping available around you easily in

vary

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varying

varied

instant varieties.

moreover

in addition

Moreover

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majority

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the majority

of people

belongs

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belong

medoiter

a vaguely specified concern

matter

scale whereas

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the scale, whereas

the scale whereas

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they prefer small shops while living in urban areas

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such

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lack of household things and in case of unexpected guest so that time these shops are much convenient.

Hence

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availability of products in emergency time is quite helpful

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In conclusion, I recapitulate

this

statement online shopping

explore

Suggestion

explores

on some cases by who uses technology

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yet small sector business can not be

effected

acted upon; influenced

affected

this

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due to people are satisfied.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
39Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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THE GROWTH OF ON LINE SHOPING WILL ONE DAY LET TO ALL SHOPS IN TOWNS AND CITY CLOSING DO YOU AGREE OR DISAREE ?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in word, picture, music or films) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In some countries, there are more young people enrolled in work based training instead of attending university. Do the advantage of the situation outweigh the disadvantages.

Restoration of old buildings in main cities involves enormous government expenditure. It would be more beneficial to spend this money to build new houses and roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.