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The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
science
 qualifications in
Malaysia
 and Singapore.
Overall
, both
the
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countries show a decreasing rate of
science
 qualifiers up to
master’s
degree
.
Although
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
science
 qualifications in
master’s
degree
 is
same
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the same
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 for both
the
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countries,
Malaysia
 outraces Singapore in no
science
 qualification at all. In
Malaysia
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,Malaysia
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 around 65 %
people
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of people
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 do not opt for
science
whereas
school
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schools
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 leaving exams in
Science
 are qualified by 35%
students
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of students
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.
However
, less number of
students
 go for higher studies with a percentage of about 20% for
Bachelor’s
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a Bachelor’s
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Degree
 reaching a low point of about 3.5% for
Master’s
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a Master’s
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Degree
. Singapore houses around 60%
people
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of people
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having
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 no interest in
science
 qualifications.
Although
,
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apply
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 30%
students
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of students
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 choose
science
 in school leaving exams, only 20%
students
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of students
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 qualify bachelor’s
degree
.
This
 country
also
 contains less than 4 %
people
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of people
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 who pass out with
master’s
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a master’s
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degree
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degrees
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 just as in
case
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the case
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 of
Malaysia
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words science, malaysia, master’s, degree, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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