Some people say the main way to be happy in liffe os to have a lot of money. How might haveing a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

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People have different approaches towards a happy
life
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. According to a few people
money
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is the key to happiness. A good financial status can make someone happy.
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, there are other factors too, that are even more important in
life
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as
money
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cannot buy everything in
this
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world. Admittedly, a wealthy person has easy access to all the facilities in
life
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. Food, clothes and shelter are the basic necessities for the livelihood. An individual with higher income can avail all the benefits and
luxaries
something that is an indulgence rather than a necessity
luxuries
of
life
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.
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, people can go
to
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for
on
vacations, have good social status in the society and can easily go to the market to buy anything they like if they have
money
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to spend, fulfilling all their wishes.
now-a-days
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Now-a-days
,
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,
money
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is
also
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considered as power, as it makes easy access to most of the things. Even though being wealthy, brings happiness, it is not the only factor
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in
leading a good
life
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. The self content is majorly responsible for it. Every rich person or family is not happy. The other things that makes us
happy is love
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happy is to love
, care, support, good health, self- respect and attention of loved ones.
Money
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cannot get these things anywhere in
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the world. These feelings
only makes
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only make
us a human being
.
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.
the
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The
affection we get from our family and friends is incomparable to any amount of cash.
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, any woman in the world is the happiest when she holds her baby
first
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time in her hands. The time we spend and bonds we
have helps
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have helped
us in making memories which we can cherish forever in our lives. According to me, happiness is the by-product of self- content. It depends completely on the perspective and priorities of a person. Emotional and mental stability is crucial to enjoy everything in
life
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.
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, we should make sure we are taking care of ourselves and our loved ones from every aspect to
satisfied
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satisfy
and happy in
life
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.
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