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Some people think that a good diet and exercise are not necessary for a health and long life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Having a healthy
lifestyle
 is trending nowadays. So many
influencers
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influences
 show their daily
exercise
 and good
diet
 to encourage people to start having a healthy
lifestyle
.
However
, some people believe that it is just a trend,
then
 we can still be healthy and have a long
life
 without doing
exercise
 of having a proper
diet
.
This
 thought might be due to the condition of older generations who can have a long
life
 without giving any effort and attention regarding healthy lifestyles. In
this
 essay, I shall give some arguments why
this
 way of thinking is not applicable anymore for the current situation and generations. I believe both having a proper
diet
 and routine
exercise
 are essential for our health.
To begin
 with, it is true that so many older generations are healthy and have a long
life
 though they never do fitness or have a good
diet
 as what celebrities do nowadays.
However
, we have to analyse deeply the reason why those
lifestyle
Suggestion
lifestyles
 were not essential in the past.
For example
, 30 years ago, the level of air pollution was not as high as it is now. People can easily breathe clean air in past decades. Citizens nowadays, especially those who live in big cities, have to neutralise the pollution
that is
 absorbed in their body by routinely drink the infused water,
for instance
, for the detoxification process.
Secondly
, older generations’ professions related to physical activity jobs, namely becoming a farmer, carpenter, and so on. They
also
 have to walk miles away daily to reach their working place. Most workers nowadays commute by using their cars and sit on their chair all day long.
Hence
, they need to go to the gym unless they will be diagnosed with obesity in the near future.
Third
, older generations’ can easily get their fresh and healthy
food
 from their garden. Most of the current generations live in the high-rise flats with no garden. They eat fast
food
 and processed
food
 as the alternative way for the limited land and time condition.
This
 is the reason why people nowadays have to take care of their proper
diet
 and make an effort to pick or prepare their
food
. In conclusion, it is
true there
Accept comma addition
true, there
 are some cases in which older generations are healthy and have a long
life
 without
doing
the act that results in something coming to be
making
 a healthy
lifestyle
.
However
, the current condition
is
Suggestion
was
 totally different with it was in the past. Starting from the pollution, people’s sedentary
lifestyle
, and the consumption of processed
food
.
Thus
, I believe the current generations have to make a time and effort to do the
exercise
 and have
proper
Suggestion
a proper diet
diet
 if they want to stay healthy and
life
Suggestion
live
 longer.
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