The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There has been
dicussion
an extended communication (often interactive) dealing with some particular topic
discussion
decision
on comparing
people
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peoples'
person's
peoples
health
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today against
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future
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the future
. Some people believe that average standard of people's
health
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will be
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
in the
future
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than
its
the thing named or in question
it
is now whereas, others don't. I think it depends on the people how they manage to give importance and time to their
health
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.
Dicussion
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Discussion
on
people
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peoples'
peoples
health
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had become a hot topic today. These days 80% of people
work
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on computer
continiously
at every point
continuously
sitting on
chair
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a chair
the chair
for 8 hours
this
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tend
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tends
to get disease like eye infection, obesity or back pain.
Moverover
in addition
Moreover
, many people choose travel by car against walking or cycling
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lead to obesity.
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,
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
in a car does not give any physical activity, which has high chances of obesity, and no activity many
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also effect
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also affects
also affect
health
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over a period of time.
Bottom line
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The bottom line
is there are very high chances
this
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trend may continue in
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future
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the future
and may have more effect on
heath
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the heath
in
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future
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the future
.
However
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, there may be a possibility due to the new technology people may improve their
heath
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
in
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future
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the future
. Companies should introduce new
benifits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
to
employee’s
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an employee’s
the employee’s
i
objective form of "I"
me
I
.
e
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E
;
work
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from home, gym at
work
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, concept like
work
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on hold where people can get break from
work
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to get involved with other
activties
any specific behavior
activities
that can keep one
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health
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healthy
.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
,
Instead
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of travel by car, one can walk or cycle to travel. If
such
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improvement takes place in
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future
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the future
, there is a possibility of people get healthier than now. In conclusion, there is an argument on people's heath getting lower than it is now but , it is all depends on how people are going to
work
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on their daily routine, there are
also
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a chances of people getting healthier if they change they trend of comfort life which is followed now by many people
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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