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The usage of Credit cards and Debit cards seems to be a growing trend. Will plastic money completely replace the currency notes and coins used at present? Do you think this is a positive development?

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The popularity of
credit
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 and debit cards has increased tremendously over the years.
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 is definitely a positive development because cards have eliminated the need to carry
cash
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 in our wallets.
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, I
don’t
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 expect cards to replace paper currency in the near future. If
credit
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 and debit cards are popular,
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 because they are very convenient. Carrying huge amounts of
cash
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 in one’s wallet is not very safe. Cards eliminate
this
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 need. What’s more,
credit
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 cards allow people to buy things even if they
don’t
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 have any balance in their bank accounts. Cards have
also
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 made online transactions possible. If there were no
credit
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 cards, the e-commerce industry would not develop at
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 pace. On the flip side, data
security
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 is a concern when you make payments using your cards. Hackers are after your
credit
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card
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 details and
security
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 breaches can wipe the entire amount in your bank accounts.
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, banks and
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 companies are working hard to fix
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 problem. And thanks to
security
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 measures like two-factor identification
card
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 payments have become much safer over the years. Still, I
don’t
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 think that
cards
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the cards
 will completely replace
cash
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. Many small businesses do not have the technology required to accept
cash
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 payments. If you buy things from a roadside vendor you will have to pay
cash
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. I
don’t
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 think that they will be in a position to accept cards any time soon.
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, we are emotionally attached to paper currency.
This
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 may
also
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 prevent the total adoption of cards. To conclude, the growing popularity of
credit
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 and debit cards is indeed a positive development.
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, even
today
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today's
security
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 concerns prevent many people from making
card
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 payments.
This
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 might change in the future, but until everyone has the facility to accept cards, they are not going to replace traditional currency.

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