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Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is considered by some that teachers should avoid giving
homework
 to pupils, whereas there are some who believe that
homework
 is the crucial part of educational
system
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systems
. In my opinion,
although
 not having
homework
 can give students more time for practical activities,
homework
 is important to build a sense of responsibility in them.
This
 essay is going to
look on the both
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look on both the
 sides and
then
 will decide which approach is best. On the one hand, in the absence of
homework
 pupils will have more time to do practical skills,
such
 as communication and problem solving. Keeping in mind the needs of
current job market
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the current job market
, these skills
are
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is
 more valuable than academic studies.
For example
, a recent survey done by Pakistan government showed that about 50 percent of university graduates are unemployable because they lack necessary job skills.
On the other hand
, critics argue that
homework
 is a key component of education because it develops a sense of responsibility among students which is a necessary thing to have. It is a common saying that a responsible man is a successful man because it does not matter how talented you are, if you are not striving for your goal
then
 you cannot achieve it. To illustrate, one of my friends has achieved
first
 position in his bachelor’s degree despite the fact he was not intelligent
instead
 he had put
extra hard work
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the extra hard work
 in his studies. In conclusion, having practical skills is no doubt valuable to get a job and
absence
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an absence
 of
homework
 can give more time to master
them but
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them, but
 the sense of responsibility is the key component to get success and it can only be attained by doing
homework
.
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