In some countries, a few people earn extremaly high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should coltrol salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both of views and give your opinion.

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There are some countries where only a tiny slice of the population receives
extremaly
to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect
extremely
high wages. Whereas it is believed that
this
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brings positive outcomes for a nation, others argue that authorities should regulate and limit how much a single person can earn.
This
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essay is going to explain both views and give my opinion. Some people think that the majority of wealth should be owned by whom know how to invest and multiply it.
In other words
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, only a small number of people are skilled to do
this
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.
For instance
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,
investitors
a scientist who devotes himself to doing research
investigators
have the
knowlege
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
to choose the most competitive new businesses and sponsor them.
As a result
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, they generate job vacancies for those who do not have the same soft skills and the economy is
hited
made warm or hot ('het' is a dialectal variant of 'heated')
heated
hired
hosted
by the increase of the buying power of
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population.
However
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,
salarie
something that remunerates
salary
disparity leads to social inequality and poverty since who
is in the top of the piramyd always earn
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is at the top of the pyramid always earning
is in the top of the pyramid always earning
is in the top of the pyramid always earn
is in the top of the pyramids always earn
the largest slice of the
profitis
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profit is
and put pressure on those who are
in
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at
the
botton
the lower side of anything
bottom
, earning the lowest wages and working for long hours. Often, these people do not have a living wage to support themselves and their family.
This
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situation leads to social problems
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as crime. The rapid increase of violence in developing countries is an example of the negative impact of the concentration of wealth. To conclude, I believe that societies should be more equal when it comes to salaries and it is not sustainable to keep an elite earning unrealistic wages while others are facing hunger. The
governmente
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
should legislate to enable a fair wealth distribution. By doing
this
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, all classes in a nation could afford a decent
live
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living
life
and many social problems would be addressed.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
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  • despite

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