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There seem to be an increase number of crime committed each year, some think that the best way to use as deterrent is death penalty, others believe that there are other measures needed.

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With the
increase
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 in
crime
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 rate recorded yearly
,
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,
most people believe that the best
way
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 to curb
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increase
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 is to sentence criminals to
death
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. While others say that subjecting them to
punishment
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 should be a better
way
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 to prevent
this
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increase
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.
This
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 essay seeks to discuss both views in the following paragraphs. Some people believe that
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death penalty
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the death penalty
 is the only
way
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 of making the society
crime
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 free and making the citizens adhere to certain laws.
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, the Arab world has placed a
punishment
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 by
death
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 for individuals who engage in crimes
such
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 as robbery, use of illicit drugs and consumption of
alchol
a liquor or brew containing alcohol as the active agent
alcohol
 which is found to be offensive in their religion.
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 method of
punishment
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 has
succeded
attain success or reach a desired goal
succeeded
 in creating a high moral standard in these societies as these crimes are gradually going extinct.
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, other forms of
punishment
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such
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 as sending criminals to prison, use of rehabilitation
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 and engaging them with community services
has been
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have been
 a helpful approach in hindering the
increase
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 in
crime
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 rate rather than
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death sentence
Suggestion
a death sentence
the death sentence
. For clarity, countries like America and Britain believe so much in educating and rehabilitating criminals to help them become people
to
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in
of
 the society.
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, these countries
also
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 believe that judgement on any
criminl
someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime
criminal
 matter depends on the intensity of the
crime
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. Crimes
such
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 as petty robbery and
shop lifting
the act of stealing goods that are on display in a store
shoplifting
 should not have
death
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 as its penalty. In conclusion,
Although
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death penalty
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the death penalty
 is a
way
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 of maintaining a
crime
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 free
environment but
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environment, but
then
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 not all
crime
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 deserves
this
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 form of
punishment
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. Other methods listed above can be used to curb
crime
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increase
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.
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