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There seem to be an increase number of crime committed each year, some think that the best way to use as deterrent is death penalty, others believe that there are other measures needed.

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With the
increase
 in
crime
 rate recorded yearly
,
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,
most people believe that the best
way
 to curb
this
increase
 is to sentence criminals to
death
. While others say that subjecting them to
punishment
 should be a better
way
 to prevent
this
increase
.
This
 essay seeks to discuss both views in the following paragraphs. Some people believe that
death penalty
Suggestion
the death penalty
 is the only
way
 of making the society
crime
 free and making the citizens adhere to certain laws.
For instance
, the Arab world has placed a
punishment
 by
death
 for individuals who engage in crimes
such
 as robbery, use of illicit drugs and consumption of
alchol
a liquor or brew containing alcohol as the active agent
alcohol
 which is found to be offensive in their religion.
This
 method of
punishment
 has
succeded
attain success or reach a desired goal
succeeded
 in creating a high moral standard in these societies as these crimes are gradually going extinct.
On the other hand
, other forms of
punishment
such
 as sending criminals to prison, use of rehabilitation
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 and engaging them with community services
has been
Suggestion
have been
 a helpful approach in hindering the
increase
 in
crime
 rate rather than
death sentence
Suggestion
a death sentence
the death sentence
. For clarity, countries like America and Britain believe so much in educating and rehabilitating criminals to help them become people
to
Suggestion
in
of
 the society.
Finally
, these countries
also
 believe that judgement on any
criminl
someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime
criminal
 matter depends on the intensity of the
crime
. Crimes
such
 as petty robbery and
shop lifting
the act of stealing goods that are on display in a store
shoplifting
 should not have
death
 as its penalty. In conclusion,
Although
death penalty
Suggestion
the death penalty
 is a
way
 of maintaining a
crime
 free
environment but
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environment, but
then
 not all
crime
 deserves
this
 form of
punishment
. Other methods listed above can be used to curb
crime
increase
.
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