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Q:Countries should spend money on trains rather than new roads. Do you agree or disagree?

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People nowadays prefer to travel via
train
 than by buses or private vehicles. I totally agree with the fact that the government should spend more on maintenance or improving the services of
train
Suggestion
training
 facilities rather than constructing new roads.
This
 essay will discuss the benefits of
train
 services which include frequent
connectivity and
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connectivity, and
 they are more environmentally friendly. Trains are faster than buses or cars and it has stopped even in small villages. While
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 through trains we do not
fact
abstaining from food
fast
 traffic and it runs at higher maximum speed.
This
 will help passengers to reach their destination on time and with a short duration of travel compared to road journeys.
For example
, to travel from Ahmedabad to Mumbai in a bus it takes 14 hours while in the
train
 it takes only 8 hours.
Also
,
train
 journeys are quite environment-friendly. A
train
 can accommodate more number of
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 when compared to buses or cars. So less emission of carbon dioxide because of fewer cars.
This
 will
also
 help in fighting climate change which is a global issue.
For example
, Delhi's government has increased the metro frequency and has
mad
produced by a manufacturing process
made
 free of charge for women passengers. So trains will help not only to save
time but
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time, but
also
 will help us to save our environment to a global extent.
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