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In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

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Smoking is injurious to health. We come across
this
 statement very often like on a television a person is smoking or on a cigarette packet.
As a result
 of
this
 warning, much wise government has banned smoking in public areas.
This
 essay will discuss why smoking is bad for public health and
also
 dangerous in some places.
Firstly
, not many people are comfortable with the
smoke
 produced by cigarettes. A cloud of cigarette
smoke
 is very harmful to our body and if consumed very frequently it will affect our lungs. So there should be a special smoking
zone
 where people can
smoke
 and other people remain unaffected by the polluted air. Especially near the school area, kids will not be aware of the dangerous air produced from the cigarettes. So it should not be allowed near the kid's area and people who want to
smoke
 should make a move to a proper smoking area. It will
also
 protect kids from the smoking habit.
Secondly
, if there is not
proper smoking
Suggestion
a proper smoking zone
zone
 and people can
smoke
 wherever they wish it might lead to some fatal accidents. Like near the petrol station if somebody is smoking and leave the lightened cigarette over there only it might result in a bad fire taking many lives at stake. So smoking should not be in public and a dedicated
zone
 should be given to the smokers. In conclusion, it is a very good decision from the government to ban
smoke
Suggestion
smoking
 in public places and keep the environment a healthy and safe place to live in.
Also
, it is advisable for the people who want to
smoke
 to enter the special smoking
zone
 and not affect public health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory problems
  • cardiovascular disease
  • clean air
  • public health
  • hospital admissions
  • economic benefits
  • smoking cessation
  • cultural shift
  • healthcare costs
  • smoke-free laws
  • enforcement
  • designated smoking areas
  • compliance
  • social attitudes
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