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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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It goes without saying that
information
technology
have greatly influenced
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has greatly influenced
 human’s life for years and people are getting more depends on it. With undeniably spectacular features, there is a mixture of pros and cons that social should be aware of. Many reasons could be given to demonstrate for the diversification of
information
technology
’s benefits. The appearance of
Internet
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the Internet
 should be one of the most powerful evidence by opening a whole new online-world connected by a computer network linked together. Therefrom, geographical distance would be no longer matter. People can find new friends,
enterprise
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enterprises
an enterprise
 can effectively market their products,
families
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family
 members can see each other every
day no
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day, no
 matter where they are and in fact, there are nothing you can’t find from
Internet
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the Internet
. Being said that, the ways
information
technology
 benefit people are countless.
However
, everything has its dark side. As mentioned,
Internet
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the Internet
 would show you everything you are requiring
for which
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for, which
 means there are no distinguishes between good and bad, true and false
information
.
This
 is especially harmful for the ones who are not sober enough to select what to follow and sadly, trends which are widely
spreading
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spread
 online are not all good.
As a result
, it might cause bad
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
, negative attitude or even a real-life death.
Nevertheless
, it can’t be denied or refused the crucial role of
information
technology
 during a modern world evolution. Some measures could be applied to control the drawbacks
such
 as the network censorship, the wisely picky data
sources
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source
 selection or a worldwide social education. In conclusion,
although
 there are some detrimental impacts, the integral role of
technology
 in human life is unquestionable. I believe if we use it wisely there are only benefits that remain.
Submitted by Thanh on

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