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Some people think that children should learn, how to compete, but others think that children shoul be taught to cooperate to become more a useful adult. Express some reasons for both the views and give your opinion :

#people #children #shoul #adult
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The children are
delicate tender
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delicate, tender
 buds of the
society
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, who bloom under the shadow of the their parents and the
society
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 at large. A child’s mind is a clean slate and its the parents job to inculcate good habits and etiquettes. Different people want their children to be competitive while others want their children to be cooperative
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with
 others. I would like my children to learn a cooperative
dwelling but
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dwelling, but
 have a knack of competitiveness. Since man is a social animal and to live in a
society
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 peacefully one has to have a sense of cooperativeness and a sense to help others in the
society
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. The child should inculcate gentle and polite mannerisms, and have a soft pleasing speech.
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example there
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example, there
 are so many road rage cases
where
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Where
 even people are murdered, can be avoided by a polite talk and a humble admission, while being aggressive and rude can spoil the scenario.
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 being competitive is
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 necessary
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,
 as
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 brings out the qualities and the results which are not at all possible without a competitive environment. Aggression
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 competitiveness and desire to achieve greatness go hand in hand
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,
 but children should learn to control their aggression.
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 should a healthy competition where your aggression is directed to the competition and not the competitor. Drawing the parallels, one should learn to be polite, humble
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 increase their patience and learn the habit of sharing and teamwork.
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example any
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example, any
 team game like
football is
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football, is
 a combination of competitiveness and cooperation, so should be our life..
a
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A
 healthy game of life.
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