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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The development of railways is expensive than roads. Government should spend more money for
railways
Suggestion
the railways
 or not, is a controversial issue. I do agree with the fact that, the budget for the railways should be higher than that of the roads. Because, a journey by train is far more comfortable than by road-vehicles.
Moreover
,
environment
Suggestion
environmental
 pollution can
also
 be reduced in the same way.
First
 of all, during the journey through
roads
Suggestion
the roads
, people need to be worried about the traffic jams, killing the valuable time and they often get late to reach the destination, which is absent in case of railways.
Furthermore
, a journey by train is much more relaxing than the vehicles move on the roads, due to having
smooth rail path
Suggestion
a smooth rail path
 rather than the beats of the roads.
For example
, due to traffic jams, it takes almost 6 to 7 hours to reach Dhaka from Kushtia by a bus,
in contrast
 to which, only 5 hours are needed by train.
Secondly
, as railways are not available in everywhere, people are bound to travel by bus or other motor vehicles by road.
However
, these vehicles use fossil fuels, which pollute the environment.
On the other hand
, if Government assures the availability of railways with the trains consuming renewable energies, connecting all the towns within the country, citizens would prefer to travel via railways, which will save the climate.
For example
, 18% of pollution is caused by vehicles, moving on the road, according to the experts, which could be reduced to almost 5% by developing the railways. So, it can be concluded that, development
in
Suggestion
of
 railways would help workers to be punctual as well as to save the country environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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