Some people believe that universities should make sport a compulsory module on all degree courses as rates of obesity are getting higher and higher. To what extent do you agree?

Sports is something that almost everyone enjoys during their teenage no matter their gender.
Also
, it can support someone in both physical as well as mental fitness. From my point of view, I totally agree
to
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with
the concept of making
sport
a compulsory module in universities. The supporting factors to my statement are explained as we move
further
. I believe, health is the only wealth that we can carry with us till our
last
breath. And a healthy young generation should be the cover face
for
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of
a growing country. When a nation is compromising on it's people's health, no matter how economically successful the country is, we can say they are loosing their
peeks
the most extreme possible amount or value
peaks
. In order to ensure a healthy generation, compulsory sports among youngsters can be our
first
step. There are people who love sports and vice versa. When it is compulsory, everyone gets a chance to
atleast
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at least
try it. Most of them might have hated it just because they never experienced it. So
its
it is
it's
a chance, for a group of people to make a choice after experiencing it rather than hating it straight. Sports is the enjoyable version of daily
work out
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
workout
. Who wouldn't prefer to enjoy their time and at the same time,
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
some extra pounds or be fit??
Also
, it is a great way to engage people with each other and
hence
make new friendship circles other than over social media.
As a result
, we can make our young generation more bonded while
fit
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fitting
at the same time.
Recent studies shows
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A recent study shows
Recent study shows
, a person's mental health
is imroved
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are improved
is improved
when he is engaged in acts like sports/dance etc..
This
is
also
another benefit of adding
sport
in our daily
rutine
an unvarying or habitual method or procedure
routine
routines
. Students are the future's hope. Let's nourish them with all they need and what we can give. Each step can be a really great move.
Sport
is not limited
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does not limit
doesn't limit
to someone's physical abilities. There are many
volnurable
susceptible to attack
vulnerable
sport
activities which are suitable for both physically
abled
(usually followed by 'to') having the necessary means or skill or know-how or authority to do something
able
and specially
abled
people. With all these points, I extremely support the proposal of making
sport
a compulsory module in all the universities.
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