Some people believe that universities should make sport a compulsory module on all degree courses as rates of obesity are getting higher and higher. To what extent do you agree?

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Sports is something that almost everyone enjoys during their teenage no matter their gender.

Also

, it can support someone in both physical as well as mental fitness. From my point of view, I totally agree

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with

the concept of making

sport

a compulsory module in universities. The supporting factors to my statement are explained as we move

further

. I believe, health is the only wealth that we can carry with us till our

last

breath. And a healthy young generation should be the cover face

for

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a growing country. When a nation is compromising on it's people's health, no matter how economically successful the country is, we can say they are loosing their

peeks

the most extreme possible amount or value

peaks

. In order to ensure a healthy generation, compulsory sports among youngsters can be our

first

step. There are people who love sports and vice versa. When it is compulsory, everyone gets a chance to

atleast

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at least

try it. Most of them might have hated it just because they never experienced it. So

its

it is

it's

a chance, for a group of people to make a choice after experiencing it rather than hating it straight. Sports is the enjoyable version of daily

work out

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

workout

. Who wouldn't prefer to enjoy their time and at the same time,

loose

fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense

lose

some extra pounds or be fit??

Also

, it is a great way to engage people with each other and

hence

make new friendship circles other than over social media.

As a result

, we can make our young generation more bonded while

fit

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fitting

at the same time.

Recent studies shows

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A recent study shows

Recent study shows

, a person's mental health

is imroved

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are improved

is improved

when he is engaged in acts like sports/dance etc..

This

also

another benefit of adding

sport

in our daily

rutine

an unvarying or habitual method or procedure

routine

routines

. Students are the future's hope. Let's nourish them with all they need and what we can give. Each step can be a really great move.

Sport

is not limited

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does not limit

doesn't limit

to someone's physical abilities. There are many

volnurable

susceptible to attack

vulnerable

sport

activities which are suitable for both physically

abled

(usually followed by 'to') having the necessary means or skill or know-how or authority to do something

able

and specially

abled

people. With all these points, I extremely support the proposal of making

sport

a compulsory module in all the universities.

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