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Some people say that shops should sell the food products of local markets whenever possible, rather than importing from abroad. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many people believe that outlets should sell the eatables produced by the local markets
instead
 of importing from other parts of the world.
However
, I agree that
such
 a trend will certainly help the economy by reducing
cost
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costs
 and providing more
employment
 opportunities in spite of few drawbacks. People who support the idea of selling eatables of local markets believe that
such
 trend will,
firstly
, help in cutting costs. A lot of taxes and duties need to be paid while importing food products. Selling the products of the local markets help in saving these taxes. Saving in direct and indirect overheads helps in reducing overall cost.
This
 results in wider availability of these products to all income level people. Another advantage is the conservation of foreign
currency which
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currency, which
otherwise
 has to be paid to pay for the imports.
In addition
 to
this
, marketing local products helps in enhancing
employment
 opportunities. Markets need to be loaded with a variety of products in order to reduce the reliance on imports.
Therefore
, a variety of food products need to be produced at their own.
Hence
,
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,
the local people get
myraid
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a myriad
myriad
the myriad
mired
 of
employment
 opportunities.
For example
, women can make sweets and snacks at home and supply to local shops
to sell
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sell
this products
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this product
these products
. Selling localised products has its own drawbacks too.
Firstly
, local products
lack
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lacks
 standardisation. People don't buy these products considering
these
plural of that
those
 of inferior quality.
However
,
few rules
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a few rules
 and regulations should be made to ensure the quality of these products. To conclude, selling local products help in reducing overall cost and improving
employment
 opportunities.
However
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However, such
such
 a trend has few drawbacks, but the benefits far outweigh the disadvantages.
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