Some people think it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others believe that they should educate with each other. Do you agree or disagree?

These days there are two models of educate
such
as single
gender
or mixed
gender
educate. So some people agree with single
gender
educate, but others agree
by
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with
multi
gender
educate. I agree with mixed
gender education
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gender, education
and in
this
essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
explain why
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
agree with
this
issue. At the
first
, when boys and girls educate with together, they learn how to behave with
dissenting
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dissents
sex, they learn mentality and morality of their opposite sex.
Also some
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Also, some
children are shy and they
can not
can not
cannot
communicate with opposite
gender
, so when they mixed with dissenting
gender
while their childhood, they can win on their
shy
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shyness
and fear to communicate with them. In the
second
, single sex education
also
has some advantages.
For
instance all
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instance, all
of us know that male and female have a lot of
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
somatic and
mentality
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the mentality
which their usage of their environment are
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
toward together. So if they
want use one
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want to use one
common thing that needs to a
stable
meant or adapted for an occasion or use
suitable
qualification, they face
problem
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problems
a problem
. But
however
this
type of educate has
this
disadvantage, and it
can not
can not
cannot
resolve
social
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socially
communicate between boys and girls, and
also
we know that we are living in communication period so we need to have extreme relationship. In conclusion, in my
opinion it
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opinion, it
is better boys and girls
educatewith
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educate to
educate with
each other till they grow up, they can enter
to
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into
community and do their responsibility well ordered.
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