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Most people prefer ready to eat ready meals rather than homecooked food these days. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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In the current scenario, a multitude of populace loves to gorge on instant processed eatables
instead
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 of the
homecooked
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home cooked
 ones. While
this
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 phenomenon has pros of no hassles and saves a big chunk of
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, cons are prevalent as well,
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 as health takes a toll, and it is not easy on
pocket
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the pocket
. To embark on, owing to the fast pace of life, a significant segment of folks
rely
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relies
 on easy to prepare quick stuff to quench the hunger. It is an excellent concept as it does not necessitate
one
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 to through the entire process of preparing a cuisine single-handedly after a tiring day at work. A person requires a
meager
of greater importance or stature or rank
major
 amount of ingredients coupled with a few utensils. The whole procedure
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 lets
one
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 spare some
time
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 either to nurture oneself by
lazying
the deliberate act of deviating from the truth
lying
laying
lazing
 on a couch or engulf with
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 imperative household chores,
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 as grocery shopping and cleaning.
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, binging on
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 kind of items have cascading implications as well. Instant preserved meals from
market
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the market
, undeniably, deteriorate
one
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’s health with the passage of
time
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. Incessant intake of unhealthy dishes
weaken
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weakens
immune system
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the immune system
 and slowly make digestion of robust or even soft particles quite cumbersome.
Body
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The body
 will be consciously calling hazardous diseases,
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 as cancer, diabetes, and thyroid. As a report by a team of medical researchers, almost 90% are in
a
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an
 unhealthy zone because of the market ready quick meals.
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, purchasing outside processed food makes a hole in the budget because the prices are surging quite fast. To encapsulate, busy schedules make
one
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 go for
one
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-minute ready
readymade
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ready made
 eatables. Drift towards
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 a trend relieves
one
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 of the uncalled burden of preparing a meal and aids in stealing
time
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 to focus to focus on other imperative work. But, the repercussions do exist and have pernicious implications on the body and the monetary aspect as well.
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