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Overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this? How can this be solved

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Cities act as a magnet for everyone due to the quest for greener pastures and to partake in urban sprawl.
This
 cause of crowding in major cities can be solved by government actions
such
 as dispersing development
to
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in
of
 the rural areas and encouraging women to practice different birth control methods.
This
 essay will elucidate on these causes of human congestion in the urban areas and various ways to curb
this
 problem. Young school leavers who seek for jobs and better living move to the cities to make their daily living.
Also
, everyone has the notion that life in the urban areas is fast moving with numerous job opportunities due to high concentration of industries and multinational companies.
Therefore
, so many people relocate from rural areas to the cities In search of greener pasture.
Secondly
, most government offices, good schools, well equipped hospitals, private businesses are usually seen in the big cities. Due to
this
 reason, individuals and families who wish
enjoy
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to enjoy
standardized way
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a standardized way
 of living prefer to dwell in the city. The solution to overcrowding can be achieved by taking development
to
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in
of
 the rural areas.
For instance
, providing them with quality hospitals, good schools and education, building agricultural related industries and setting up most government offices.
This
 will help create employment and
decongest
 the town.
Furthermore
, the use of various birth control methods by women will drastically reduce the world’s population. In conclusion, with the political will to disperse development and
also
 a reduction in
number
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the number
 of
birth
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births
 in a country, the issue of overpopulation in large cities would be solved.
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