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The government should take responsibility for their actions to the environment. To what extent do you agree?

#government #responsibility #actions #environment
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Environmental damage can cause the extinction of some
species
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 due to the loss of their natural habitats and food sources. It is believed that
government
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 has the biggest power
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since
 taking the course of actions to save the environment. In
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 essay, I shall give some facts and opinions to support
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 statement.
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 with, only the
government
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 who has the privilege to state some regulations in the constitutions and enforce the law for either small or big violation.
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, spitting and littering, illegal logging, dumping unprocessed waste to the rivers, and so on. While the environmental activists only can report and do some protests to protect our nature, the
government
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 has the rights to fine and jail either citizens or companies who damage the environment.
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, only the
government
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 who has the rights to build a conservation land for the endangered
species
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.
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, the building of one-horned rhinoceros in Banten, West Java.
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 can prevent the extinction of the endangered
species
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. Another example is the damaging of Borneo’s forest that ruin the Orang Utans’ life. These animals need to be relocated soon as the
government
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 is still solving the issues regarding the forest destruction happened
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on
 Borneo island. Orang Utans can be sent back to their natural habitat after the problem has been solved. In conclusion, the
government
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 has the mandate to enforce the law and has the rights to build a conservation land to protect the endangered
species
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 and its habitat.
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, I believe that
government
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 has to
do
engage in
make
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 necessary course of actions to save the environment.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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