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In many countries smoking in now illegal in public places. Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #places
It is argued that smoking is being
be
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being
 banned in common
places particularly
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places, particularly
 in bus stops, shopping malls in many parts of the world.
This
 essay agrees with the statement because it affects the passive smokers and considered as bad behaviour.
To begin
 with, usage of cigarettes in public places impacts the people who do not smoke.
In other words
, It causes health problems, especially respiratory issues not only to smokers but
also
 to by-passers.
For example
, the foetus of the pregnant mother
have
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has
 detrimental effects in places like parks, malls. Another point
to
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of
 emphasis on the anti-social
behaviour it
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behaviour, it
 brings to the society.
This
 is to say that it persuades teenagers to do the same, which will make them chain-smokers eventually.
For instance
, in a fun-filled challenge competition conducted in Central Vietnam, approximately 60% of young adults enthusiastically participated in the event. In conclusion, smoking impacts not only the person who
smoke
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smokes
 but
also
 the passive smokers and it signs as a bad behaviour in the community.
Therefore
, I agree that smoking should be banned in public places.
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