Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you agree?

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There are homeless people in

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most

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. Few people think that we can help them through

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financial

support. I completely disagree

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essay will argue that why financial support does not help in elimination of homelessness and what alternative methods can be chosen to decrease the number of homeless people in

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many people think that providing

money

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to unsheltered people is

most effective way

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the most effective way

a most effective way

of facilitating, but the fact is that

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most

these people are lazy and habitual of asking

money

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the streets

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, most of the homeless people are

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addicted

addiction

to drugs. The

money

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given to them would be utilized in buying of drugs and the main problem of homelessness will remain there. Recently a study conducted in a journal of social awareness

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society

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, stated that the number of homeless people remained same even though they were given a handsome amount of cash to buy homes.

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, the homeless people do not spend the financial aid efficiently.

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, there must be alternative ways of helping them.

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, the financial aid should be utilized in creating organizations and institutions where the homeless and poor can learn new skills to support themselves and their families. The process of learning does not only reduce the unsheltered people in the

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society but

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society, but

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lowers the crime rate in the vicinity.

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, a local government in Punjab, Pakistan initiated a project in March 2018, which not only teaches poor women the skills of beautician, nursing, child care and driving but

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giving them monthly

money

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to motivate them in learning.

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helped them in getting jobs and living honourably.

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, the poor and needy people need

proper skills

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the proper skills

to earn and live comfortably. In conclusion, treating the homelessness is essential in building healthy

society

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but monetary in not the only solution. There are other ways in which these needy people can be helped.

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