Some people think that sending criminals to prison is not effective. Education and job training should be used instead. Agree or disagree?

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Many people concede that a
prison
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sentence is ineffective,
instead
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of that, education and vocational training should be encouraged. In my opinion, I am
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completely
disagree with
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view. On the one hand, putting someone in
prison
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from
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for
their
crime
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has been used for a long time, and there
always have
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always has
a reasonable explanation for
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.
Firstly
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, imprisonment is one of the best ways to ensure the safety of citizens. Depriving dangerous criminals of their freedom provide a sense of protection for other people.
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, serve a sentence as
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a reminder
of the consequence when committing a
crime
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.
This
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action
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gives
people aware that everyone has to pay for what they did and no one is an exception. The case of sexual harassment of a Vietnamese girl in the elevator
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with
of
a high – position men
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are
a perfect example for
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.
Although
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he was
a head
at or in the front
ahead
of the Danang City People’s Procuracy, he was still sent to
prison
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like any other criminals.
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, education and vocational training is not really more potential. It’s true that well-educated people can commit crimes as well. Carrying out a
crime
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is not completely depend
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does not completely depend
on people’s intellect, some
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do
just because they are bad by personality.
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, the case of murdering of a Vietnamese girl committed by a Japanese
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man
. He
have even hold
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has even held
two bachelor degree, he did thing make other people angry, and
victim’s family
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the victim’s family
suffer
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suffers
.
Otherwise
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, using training course
instead
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of imprisonment is harder to categorize criminals. Some people who
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are just being
have just been
misdemeanor
a crime less serious than a felony
misdemeanour
could be
took
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taking
part in
this
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course, but for who murder others, joining training course is not satisfactory and fair. In conclusion, for all the reasons mentioned above, people who commit a
crime
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should be
punishment
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punished
by putting in
prison
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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