It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together.

In many countries these days, families no longer have close relationships.
This
is because of the
increase
in the number of parents who
work
full-
time
and the rise in the
use
of mobile devices and
internet
Suggestion
the internet
. Solutions to
this
negative trend would be propose.
Firstly
, an important reason for the decrease in close family relationships is the
increase
in the number of parents who are employed full-
time
.
In other words
, many husbands and wives today are employed and have little
time
to interact with themselves and take care of their children.
For example
, many married couples in Nigeria
work
between eight to ten hours daily which limits the quality
time
needed to spend with themselves and interact with their children.
As a result
, many families are no longer close compared to
few years
Suggestion
a few years
ago.
Furthermore
, the
increase
in the dependency on mobile devices and internets by parents as well as a parents interfere with family relationship. It is common to see members of a family preoccupied with their phones which limits the
time
needed to discuss as a family.
For instance
, many families rarely have dinners together today because members of the household are often busy with their phones and online friends rather than being brought together.
This
situation could have improved if families reduce the
time
spent on mobile devices and on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
.
fortunately
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Fortunately
,
ther
in or at that place
there
are two promising solutions to
this
problem. One significant way to bring family closer is to
increase
the
time
off
work
for married couples. Both the government and private employers should promote part-
time
work
for at least one of the parents and
increase
the duration of holidays
such
as paternity and maternity leaves.
This
will offer husbands and wives more
time
for themselves and to care for their children. More so, efforts towards reducing the
use
of
mobile electronic device
Suggestion
a mobile electronic device
and the internets at home should be promoted.
This
could be through setting up
time
limits on the
use
of phones at home.
As a result
, there would be more
time
to bring families together. In conclusion, parents spend more
time
working and they as well as their children are becoming dependent on their phones and the
internet
which has interfered with family relationships.
This
problem
could be solve
Suggestion
could be solved
by ensuring parents have more
time
off
work
and reducing the
use
of telecommunication devices and the
internet
at home.
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