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Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

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Crime
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rate
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has seen
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saw
 steady growth over the
last
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 few years and the phenomenon can be observed around the world.
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 essay will discuss the
possbile
capable of happening or existing
possible
 reasons for the
increament
a process of becoming larger or longer or more numerous or more important
increment
 in
crime
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rate
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 and
then
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 delve into the acceptable solutions to curb the
crime
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rate
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. One of the major reasons for
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crime
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the crime rate increase
rate
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 increase can be directly linked to lack of education for
lower
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the lower class
class
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. It has been observed over the past few years that, with the development of economies around the world, pay difference between the upper
segment
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 and the lower strata of the society has increased dramatically, which is majorly due to lack of proper educational facilities for the lower
class
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.
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 results in
feeling
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a feeling
 of unjust among the lower
segment
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 of the society, which pushes these people towards
crime
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.
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, it has been observed that
eventhough
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even though
 the majority of the crimes happen in metro cities, the culprits are normally found living in slums closer to these metro cities, which do not have proper schools or universities.
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, the feeling of unjust, which is due to the lack of educational facilities, is one of the major factors for increase in
crime
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rate
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. The possible solution to the problem stated above can be better educational facilities. The government should make additional seats for lower
class
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 in the state universities and colleges.
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, professors not being able to find jobs can be asked to take lectures during evenings in state universities, which will be
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 for the lower
class
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.
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 would help in educating the lower
segment
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, which would encourage them to pursue corporate jobs and not be pushed towards
crime
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. To sum up, I believe providing better
eduation
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
addition
 to the lower strata of the society can really help in developing
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segment
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 and
also
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 help in curbing the rising
rate
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 of
crime
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rate
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.
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